A emo-poem I wrote about a recent-family problem?
February 28th 2009 by nuk in emo poemsI got tooken away from my parents, and was sent to live with my 24 yr. old sister. I stayed with my sister until August 5 (yes, I kept track..it was such a painful time for me, how could I not?).
During that time, my parents/rest of the family kept telling me things like, “Oh, no, your sister’s wrong..that never happened.” But then whenever I’d turn around to ask my sis for the real story, she’d say something like, “WHAT? Aleah, they’re lying…Don’t belive a word they say.”
Like I said, it was a painful time. Luckily, it’s over now, and my family-issue is nearly fixed, though my sister/parents are still at it, and yes I’m with my parents again ![]()
Anyway, here’s a poem I wrote just the other day about that hardship in my life. Tell me what you think:
Words full of hate
Spat into my innocent face
Torn between two lives
That of which I can’t recognize
One life is saying something bad about the other
The second life is saying that I do have a mother
Talltales and lies are quickly thrown into battle
All the while, I think of the old saying, “If you fall off a horse,
Get up and try again,”
And I picture me sitting on a large saddle
I’ve been bucked and thrown off, injured and hurt
Feelings of lonliness covered by my witty smirk
A mask can be useful during hard times
Put it on, and everyone is fooled
Everyone is blind
Luckily, those days are past
And everything that did happen
Happened so fast
Although there are nights when I miss being at my sister’s,
I think about the nights I lived there, thinking of my Mom,
And how much I missed her instead
With memories, like flim to a movie, playing
In my head
Thoughts of me smiling, and her warm embrace
Memories of me crying, and her saying that everything
Would be okay
Simple things like that making me smile
Remembering those times, and thinking
How they were all worth the while
But all good things must come to an end
The bad times are over now, and my
Family looks like they’re about to mend
So with this thought in mind,
I’m done with my poem
But I hope that I’ve taught
The readers something that’s
Worth knowing
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Ich denke, der sehr schön ist, es muss die schwere Zeit für Sie gewesen sein. Ich denke, dass Sie gut schreiben und ich den Gebrauch von similies mag. Gutes Glück mit alles, ~
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